So I'm loving the way this fic is illuminating each show through the observations of the other show's characters. It's interesting to see Jake Kane, bitter and vengeful still, wearing his grievances on his sleeve, and completely obvious to John. (What, really, did Veronica do to Jake? {in canon and here} Someone of his wealth and connections--she should be a buzzing gnat to him, that he brushes away, yet he's just as paranoid and obsessive as always. I guess she's the locus of his bitterness about losing his children, but isn't that sort of missing the point regarding both of them? However, that's human nature, to lash out at the easy target instead of examining your own responsibility. It's easy to imagine Jake and Celeste stewing in their resentment over life's disappointments and tragedies and coming to an agreement that it's all that girl's fault.)
You have a nice variety of sentence structure and a great grasp of how the characters speak. (Also, really well-edited.) And your plot is certainly VM-worthy (and Sherlock-worthy as well) in its complexity. Hope you're having fun writing it!
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Date: 2013-07-26 03:26 am (UTC)So I'm loving the way this fic is illuminating each show through the observations of the other show's characters. It's interesting to see Jake Kane, bitter and vengeful still, wearing his grievances on his sleeve, and completely obvious to John. (What, really, did Veronica do to Jake? {in canon and here} Someone of his wealth and connections--she should be a buzzing gnat to him, that he brushes away, yet he's just as paranoid and obsessive as always. I guess she's the locus of his bitterness about losing his children, but isn't that sort of missing the point regarding both of them? However, that's human nature, to lash out at the easy target instead of examining your own responsibility. It's easy to imagine Jake and Celeste stewing in their resentment over life's disappointments and tragedies and coming to an agreement that it's all that girl's fault.)
You have a nice variety of sentence structure and a great grasp of how the characters speak. (Also, really well-edited.) And your plot is certainly VM-worthy (and Sherlock-worthy as well) in its complexity. Hope you're having fun writing it!